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PostSubject: A beginning *feedback needed*   Sat Jan 24, 2015 1:31 am

so this is the beginning of a book I'm currently working on about a young girl and her irresistible desire to travel. it's called Wanderlust
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The smoothly painted white cabinet rested itself beneath a broad open window. Light covered its surface like a blanket of glowing warmth, hitting every corner of it and leaving it exposed to the world that lay beyond the little bedroom. It was fairly small in size and it only held some of its owner’s possessions; but those possessions were the most prized of all. There were 4 gradient nesting dolls from Russia. They were painted in the most exotic combination of bright colors. There were dazzling reds, royal purples, shadowy greens and a large diversity of others.
There was a petite elephant knick-knack sitting atop the cabinet as well; it was handcrafted by artisans in one of Zimbabwe’s glorious African tribes. A truly one of a kind piece of art, it was. The owner of the cabinet cherished this elephant trinket. They would come fiddle with it day by day with the oddest expressions on their face. It was as if they studied the diminutive creature, admiring the fine chiseled markings on its body.
And in addition to the artisan elephant and the exotic nesting dolls was a striking piece of Peruvian pottery. It was white with dim blue swirls and lines and dots and dashes. And on the side it read: Annora Bree Alexander.
That was the name of the cabinet’s owner. That was the name of the girl who was almost extraordinary but not quite. That was the name of Annora Bree Alexander, and this is her story.


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so what do you think; would you wanna read more?? Razz
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PostSubject: Re: A beginning *feedback needed*   Sat Jan 24, 2015 2:54 am

Hell yeah! Please feed my reading addiction! *hugs legs* write more!!

Sorry for me overreacting, but I like it so far! Keep writing! <3 -Ashy~
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PostSubject: Re: A beginning *feedback needed*   Sat Jan 24, 2015 11:45 am

It's very unique! I, too, am loving it so far. Just like Ashlyn had said, you should definitely write more.
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PostSubject: Re: A beginning *feedback needed*   Sat Jan 24, 2015 4:40 pm

thank you guys so much!
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PostSubject: Re: A beginning *feedback needed*   Mon Feb 02, 2015 1:03 am

Me three! I don't usually read this sort of genre, but it sounds great, and I might actually have to read it. XD

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